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I dont Give Poems Titles. by ~Leftover-EiDos:iconLeftover-EiDos:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Fixed




Take us to those gates
Where all goodness lies
Show us all our fates
And save us from the lies

Kill the evil within
And purify our souls
Take us in your kin
And help us reach our goals

You can be our guidance
You can be our friend
You can be our Highness
And watch our backs bend

This key is in your hand
The gates before your feet
Let us be your standing band
And march in your beat.
©2005-2009 ~Leftover-EiDos
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!HumanityInGeneral Feb 25, 2005, 2:56:57 AM
im still deciding
Religious? Spritual? Standing at a big set of doors?

but seriously, great work
a wonderful piece

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...and in a bullet proof vest/ With the windows all closed/ I'll be doing my best/ And I'll see you soon. In a telescope lens/ And when all ye want's freinds...I'll see you soon
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pelease visit my gallery [link] cos
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~Leftover-EiDos Feb 25, 2005, 3:02:13 AM
Thank you... your thoughts on my poetry means alot to me. I didnt know where to put this poem myself.
Heh... I only submitted this 3 mins ago and i already have a post.
Thank you for your Words... Then mean alot to me.
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!HumanityInGeneral Feb 25, 2005, 3:26:24 PM
no problem!

i'm a *amature* poet myself
to recive critiques I can use to improve my works is really good

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...and in a bullet proof vest/ With the windows all closed/ I'll be doing my best/ And I'll see you soon. In a telescope lens/ And when all ye want's freinds...I'll see you soon
~~~~~~~~
pelease visit my gallery [link] cos
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~Antherpanther Feb 25, 2005, 6:46:23 PM
excellent rhythmn

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I remain your obedient servant,
Antherpanther
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~Destinys-Martyr Apr 3, 2005, 5:12:24 AM
Very tight verse structure. I noticed this piece had perfectly symetry, right down to the first and second half styles perfectly mimicing one another. Your lyrics wrap up what is trying to be said, and results in not only a pleasing read but a delightful edition to my favorites.

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Oh sweet ichor of mine, let thineself flow unhindered. Welcome cold steel's embrace, cherish the hiss of whispering flesh, and let everything unto thee be held with the sweet intoxicating drum of bliss ~Destiny's Martyr~

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